Thanks Ryfkah for your welcome comments and good to hear from you.
bw
James
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Pitch
>Date: Thu, 21 Nov 2002 20:20:08 EST
>
>In a message dated 11.19.02 1:09:11 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
>
><< pitched between land
>and land and will land
>in the future beyond
>the present dark sea >>
>
>I like the cadence of these lines. I would change all of the watching
>gerunds into watch, more active. I like the feeling in yor poem.
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