Thanks Nancy. I think I need "glacial sea" to get the fact that it was very
calm and as you say a lovely sailing over the English Channel at night.



bw
James





>From: Nancy Gandhi <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Pitch
>Date: Wed, 20 Nov 2002 14:38:50 +0530
>
>I like the title a lot.  I wonder if 'on a glacial sea' is necessary -- so
>soon after 'that should not exist upon the sea'.  But then perhaps you
>wanted the repetition, as in watching... watching... watching, and 'land
>and
>land and ... land'?  Sounds like a lovely sailing.
>Nancy
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
>Behalf Of James Bell
>Sent: Tuesday, 19 November, 2002 2:38 PM
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Pitch
>
>
>One from a recent sailing. C&c welcome as always.
>
>PITCH
>
>Nothing beyond the ship riding lights
>except for specks of others like fire flies
>in the far distance
>that should not exist upon the sea
>like you and me
>though we are on deck
>watching the ship's white wash
>on a glacial sea
>watching ourselves journey together
>watching us smile at each other
>watching how we hold hands
>on deck and walk on together
>one of those moments we want
>to last forever
>
>no sunset to gaze into
>though we are together
>pitched between land
>and land and will land
>in the future beyond
>the present dark sea
>
>bw
>James


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