Mike, a couple of suggestion:
Gladly would I assume that vassalage
That could, in times past, lover firmly knit (that up there and here?
could you change one?)
To mistress, performing my ambassage
On bended knee, hoping to please by wit
And meekness. An office IŽd claim as mine,
Subservient to your will and show it
To the world, should you require, that thine
Is the word I must obey, bestow it
Like a gift. IŽd study ways of moving
You to look with firm but loving aspect (at first read the double aspect
appeared to work, on reflection I am not sure.0
Aspect on the pain IŽd suffer in my loving,
If you are going to vassalage et al, go all the way. Do more and make it
clearly your own.
Thanks.
Gary
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