Hi. James this has a nice pulse to it , a gentle lifting of the ship in the
sea's hand. A nice even flow, for me, the final strophe has nice layering of
meaning. Good read, for which, thanks. Regards Arthur.
----- Original Message -----
From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, November 19, 2002 9:08 AM
Subject: New sub: Pitch
> One from a recent sailing. C&c welcome as always.
>
> PITCH
>
> Nothing beyond the ship riding lights
> except for specks of others like fire flies
> in the far distance
> that should not exist upon the sea
> like you and me
> though we are on deck
> watching the ship's white wash
> on a glacial sea
> watching ourselves journey together
> watching us smile at each other
> watching how we hold hands
> on deck and walk on together
> one of those moments we want
> to last forever
>
> no sunset to gaze into
> though we are together
> pitched between land
> and land and will land
> in the future beyond
> the present dark sea
>
>
>
> bw
> James
>
>
>
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