I like the use of because and now and the line breaks.
I like the circular movement of 1st line to last.
I don't much care for the title.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 11.12.02 12:41:23 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< It’s hard to see my way because
the leaves have fallen. Now
they drift where once the clear path was—
it’s hard to see my way. Because
the light is brief, I dare not pause;
I’ll find the track somehow.
It’s hard to see my way because
the leaves have fallen now. >>
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