Hi Christina,
Perhaps there's no need to embroider/invent things that are false. I mean
I'm thinking of a list of three... then I'm thinking that there couple be a
signle thing, a pair of something, and three things. Lots of things come in
pairs: shoes, slippes, gloves, stockings... (maybe - but I'm inventing here
- a pair of granny boots or shoes for someone who was always out or a pair
of slippers for someone who stays at home.) Perhaps I think of it not being
embroidering as highlighting/stressing a point. Sort of still telling the
truth, but not the whole stark truth, and emphasising the truth...
However, I say that because I'm someone who believes that fiction is a way
of being honest, of telling the truths that facts can't always show. But I'm
also someone who hopes he believes that respect for other people matters
more than art. So I feel your quandry.
Bob
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Daisy (Bob)
>Date: Thu, 14 Nov 2002 13:52:47 EST
>
>Thanks very much indeed, Bob. You've indirectly raised something that
>troubles me about writing to do with the honesty of what you write when
>it's
>not fiction and particularly when it's about a person. My problem with the
>first couplet is that's all she left (as far as I know) and I find it very
>difficult to 'embroider' events as I see or remember them. So the simple
>solution of inventing an additional object doesn't feel like an option.
>I'd
>feel almost as though I'd allowed a poem get in the way of truth. Perhaps
>this seems potty but I really can't help it. I wonder if this kind of
>thing's an issue for anyone out there?
>Anyhow, your comments are, as ever, very useful and I'll use them for the
>revision.
>bw
>christina
>
>
>
>
> >
> > Hi Christina,
> > I like this. The narrator's voice comes across clear and loud.
> > I'm thinking I'd like all the lines to work to the same pattern (with
>two or
> > three phrases in each line) (-and perhaps the last line being the only
>one
> > with it's lingering single phrase...).
> > I, too, think the "with nobs on" doesn't work so well. I've bracketed
>notes
> > below...
> > Bob
> >
> >
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>
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