Hello again Arthur,
I liked this piece a lot. Youīve captured the feel and tone of those rather dreary, wet and windy autumn days. There isnīt anything I could suggest, except in the second line of stanza1. I found the word `rainrunī didnīt work for me. I donīt think thatīs because itīs an invented word ( which I presume it is, correct me if Iīm wrong) I think itīs more the combination of sounds in the phrase `rainrun wingsī. This is a bit of an awkward one to get your tongue round, especially if you have a sibilant `rīas I have. Having said that I liked the idea of using wings as an image for the wind, and the other images in the poem.
Best wishes, Mike
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