nice little um,er, triolet, David! I like the smooth languare which suits
this kind of poem. Only bit that strikes me as not so smooth is
where once the clear path was
I wonder if that will smoothen up..
they drift down where the clear path was
?
bw
SallyE
on 12/11/02 8:41 am, David Anthony at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Autumn Traveller
>
> It’s hard to see my way because
> the leaves have fallen. Now
> they drift where once the clear path was—
> it’s hard to see my way. Because
> the light is brief, I dare not pause;
> I’ll find the track somehow.
> It’s hard to see my way because
> the leaves have fallen now.
>
> David Anthony
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