Hi Nancy
yes that's the secret but obviously I need to make things a little clearer.
(Gretchen was meant to indicate a German lover during the war)
BW
Christine
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From: Nancy Gandhi
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Sent: 11/11/02 04:57
Subject: Re: sub-secret
Hi,
I feel there's a lot going on here, but I'm confused -- it looks as
though
the daughter is one of the twins; I can't figure out the relationships
between the people here. Is 'her' the aunt? and where does Gretchen
come
into it? Is that the secret? I liked the washable blue Quink.
Nancy Gandhi
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From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
Behalf Of Bousfield, Christine [CES]
Sent: Sunday, 10 November, 2002 11:08 PM
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Subject: sub-secret
Dear All
an oldish poem revised a few times. Folk tell me it's too short for all
that
information and they want to hear from uncle-but I'm stuck and I like
the
almost sonnet look. What do you think?
BW
Christine
Secret
Her twins lived a few hours; her daughter,
named Verity for a dead sister,
married a young airman in New York State
who deserted for a bimbo on the Internet.
My aunt strained her eyes penning airmail,
washable blue Quink in sloping letters,
knitting tea-cosies and babies' leggings,
baking fatless sponges for chapel bazaars.
We slept on clouds of goose feathers
in their attic in County Durham,
white lace pillowslips scented like gardens;
I never cared for her much after Gretchen,
Uncle said at her funeral. Should've stayed
in Germany in forty five. We never got on.
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