Hi David, Some surfing galoots treat Malabu's as Chevy's and run poor
innocent souls ragged. Glad you enjoyed the figuring. Philip
>From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Re Re: new sub: Son of the Surf - second draft
>Date: Tue, 5 Nov 2002 19:49:19 -0330
>
>thank you very much I think it must be just, terms I know nothing of
>surfing
>words
>here in Newfoundland you can surf but only one time if the rocks don't get
>you
>the tides will :)
>I was thinking the Malabu was a Chevy
>
>I had fun trying to figure it out
>thank you
>
>Philip Burton wrote:
>
> > Dear david,This poem is representative of my earlier surreal style which
>I
> > sometimes revert to.
> >
> > The scenario is Newqauy's Finistral Bay - the premier surfing beach in
> > Europe - only accessible across a golf course! or by cliff path.
>American
> > money has bought the entire bay and is to develop it as a surfing
> > 'paradise?'- what this will do to the plentiful wildlife?
> >
> > The second stanza enters into the floating world stories told of, and
>only
> > by, the itinerent surf guys. The 'heroic' (as regarded by the surfers)
>tale
> > is about the guy who, trapped on the sea bed, somehow managed to write a
> > final word on his Malabu (large surfboard)- he wrote 'sonofabitch' with
>his
> > fingernail.
> >
> > The stanzas represent two 'sealed worlds'- the isolated bay full of
>natural
> > beauty - the drug/adrenalin/sponsor fueled surfers.
> > Philip
> >
> > >From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
> > >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> > >To: [log in to unmask]
> > >Subject: Re: new sub: Son of the Surf - second draft
> > >Date: Wed, 30 Oct 2002 19:27:41 -0330
> > >
> > >Philip,
> > >maybe it is my long nights of study these days trying to think in 3D, I
> > >don't know
> > >I 've read this more than several times and now even the new version
> > >is........
> > >right over my head. I like most of your writing so far
> > >and I was wondering could you explain this one to me.....please
> > >
> > >davidc
> > >
> > >Philip Burton wrote:
> > >
> > > > Thanks for all crits.. Here goes....2nd draft....
> > > >
> > > > Son of the Surf
> > > >
> > > > Proud as a damson - Finistral Bay
> > > > high on lawns and Michaelmas daisy
> > > > her links and shales stiff with valerian
> > > > and ancient youths, expectant
> > > > as new-laid mothers.
> > > >
> > > > Surf is not up - there are tales though
> > > > ebbing, dreams for the tongue
> > > > honed and waxed and sun-turned
> > > > tsunamis of the third, maybe fourth, kind
> > > > tunnels through foam
> > > > tunnels through time
> > > > tunnels home.
> > > >
> > > > A tellerman dips his voice
> > > > paddling the tale of the cool death
> > > > of one who, capped by undercurrent
> > > > and the surface unattainable,
> > > > had scratched on his Malabu
> > > > the fingernail epitaph
> > > >
> > > > sonofabitch
> > > >
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