Not a bad sonnet really James, although I am no expert.
Some typos though, I think, arabesque, disdain, taunt=haunt(?). Regards
Arthur
----- Original Message -----
From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, November 09, 2002 11:41 AM
Subject: New sub: Fishing, Not Fishing
> After about five or six years seriously working at this lark I finally
> manage to produce a sonnet. There are those who are serial sonneteers on
> here and I am in awe at heir skill. Tell me what you think.
>
> FISHING, NOT FISHING
>
> With the tide out on the estuary
> both sides have drawn closer,
> taunt for anglers, geese, seasoned loungers
> in the sun. Each have a separate vestiary.
> Their attention to water level
> is much older than their passing moment,
> with occasional attention to ambient
> movement, though neither cares for dazzle.
>
> Neither cares about being picturesque
> or watches background colour or shade,
> the Spey cast her would be burlesque -
> what come naturally is done without aid.
> Fish too avoid unsavoury arabesqu;
> all distain, with perfect ease, the cliche'd.
>
>
>
> bw
> James
>
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>
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