I like the rythym of your poem; I wonder if you could see if any adjectives
could be dropped and still maintain it poetic flavor.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 11.02.02 11:34:02 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< blackened clouds torment
whisper soft of winter's chill
autumn calls to stone
white and cold will hide
jade eyes with a mournful stare
of one more heartache >>
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