Thanks Mike. The last two are my favouite lines too so i can't decide what
to do. of course, this doesn't conform to a straight pantoum form at all-but
it depends whether the feeling of something missing is productive. Now I'm
in a quandary!
BW
Christine 

-----Original Message-----
From: Mike Horwood
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Sent: 31/10/02 14:15
Subject: Re. old pantoum

Hello Christine,
                      I´m not familiar with this form and I´m not in
general very fond of these strict forms that use repetition. But I liked
the incantatory rhythm of this piece and the dreamlike, haunted
atmosphere. I thought the last two lines were very powerful. I was
interested that Christina mentioned that you had broken the form with
those two lines. However that may be I still think they worked very well
in this poem. As I said, I´m not a great fan of repeating forms and
those that I like have usually been lighter or humorous pieces, however,
I can see how this form might be used to great effect for obsessive
thoughts, as Christina also mentioned.

Best wishes,    Mike