Why is it that when I see the name Pantoum, I can a mental image of a big
ol' pair of navy school knickers?
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Bousfield, Christine [CES]" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Thursday, October 31, 2002 10:37 AM
Subject: Re: old 'pantoum'
> Yes C you may be right. I'll think about it when I've unearthed Peter
> Sansom's book -under all my rubble at home!
> BW
> C
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: Christina Fletcher [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> > Sent: 30 October 2002 19:06
> > To: [log in to unmask]
> > Subject: Re: old 'pantoum'
> >
> > C, I must admit that, since I'm in complete chaos (thank god for the
> > computer), I can't find Peter Sansom's book which gives details about
> > pantoums. I know there are websites, but I'm too lazy to find at them
at
> > the mo'. But the thing that really excites me about pantoums is the way
> > two lines from the first stanza repeat in the final stanza (regardless
of
> > the length of the poem). At least, I think that's so. I think it's a
> > fabulous form for obsessive compulsive thoughts (sorry, I'm repeating
> > things I've already written but before Christine joined the list) and
this
> > has all the right ingredients but I feel let down at the end and I
suspect
> > that's because the conclusion doesn't stick to the form. The reason I
> > think this is because if this poem formed a circle it would have more
> > impact for me: the initial fear, the moving towards the conclusion that
> > was the initial fear and the whole thing repeat! ing, over and over
again.
> > I think the only way to do this is by using two lines from S1 in the
last
> > stanza. Whatdaya reckon?
> > bw
> > c
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > Let Age...
> >
> > They happened while sleeping,
> > hieroglyphs on my face;
> > as the shadows were deepening,
> > someone else took my place.
> >
> > Hieroglyphs on my face:
> > I'm not long for this earth,
> > someone else took my place,
> > someone born at my birth.
> >
> > I'm not long for this earth,
> > someone else took my place,
> > someone born at my birth
> > who looks out of my face.
> >
> > Someone else took my place,
> > I fall out of time,
> > she looks out of my face
> > and this flesh is not mine.
>
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