Synchronicity of souls? Philip
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub: Son of the Surf - second draft
>Date: Thu, 31 Oct 2002 03:50:07 EST
>
>Stanzas 2 & 3 look like a surfer moving through the foam. Reminds me of
>Arthur's poem 'The Marina'. Fascinating how you both do something similar,
>though I know you haven't seen Arthur's poem, Phil. So what's it all
>about,
>eh? Come on, tell all...
>bw
>christina
>
> > Son of the Surf
> >
> >
> > Proud as a damson - Finistral Bay
> > high on lawns and Michaelmas daisy
> > her links and shales stiff with valerian
> > and ancient youths, expectant
> > as new-laid mothers.
> >
> > Surf is not up - there are tales though
> > ebbing, dreams for the tongue
> > honed and waxed and sun-turned
> > tsunamis of the third, maybe fourth, kind
> > tunnels through foam
> > tunnels through time
> > tunnels home.
> >
> > A tellerman dips his voice
> > paddling the tale of the cool death
> > of one who, capped by undercurrent
> > and the surface unattainable,
> > had scratched on his Malabu
> > the fingernail epitaph
> >
> > sonofabitch
> >
> >
>
>
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