Hi Michi,
Here are the points I had most difficulty with in your poem. `resurrection´(S.2) if `they´ refers to the branches and grass, I´m not quite sure what `ressurection´ means in this context. `they dream how your fingers squeeze poetry from each yellow leaf´ I couldn´t get anything from this. `syllables littering the hedge like acorn seed´I also had problems relating this to the context or getting anything from it.
These were problem phrases for me, which may be my failure to read carefully. I guess it´s in the nature of this kind of list that reading and the giving of feedback happens quite fast, often in the middle of other things - my pc is in the office. And so much stuff is arriving all the time that a fast response is the only one possible. Having said that, I find any feedback helpful and worth considering and hope that these comments give you food for thought. There was a lot I liked in your poem and it was a fairly complex piece so if I´ve blundered hopelessly in my reading, please overlook anything you don´t accept.
Best wishes, Mike
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