I love the lecturing/instructional tone, relaxed but with authority, very
godlike...very Eden....
"Like" this - INTENDED DOUBLE MEANING?
Fun too. I loved supplying sound effects brrrrr crkkkkk shhhhp
"Afterwards"? After what? the making/supplying of noises?
"redbreast apples"...yes, oh yes.....
The poem has great scope, from the simplest assembly (the whole being bigger
than the parts...) to the fragility of existence and the numinous.......
"toads growing jewels" Cf Shakespeare "As You Like It" Sweet are the uses of
adversity..." (good can come from bad)?
And in this fragile world, "silence is golden"?
>From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Like this
>Date: Mon, 28 Oct 2002 14:57:25 -0000
>
>Like this: a grey-eyed girl
>dreaming of darkness
>under an afternoon sun.
>I'll give you the colours:
>French blue and tangerine,
>long greens and earths.
>You can supply the sound-effects:
>a small drone through grass-blades,
>crows creaking in the oak,
>and something pushing up
>beneath the pauses between.
>
>Afterwards you might think of them
>as portents, the noises
>and the colours -I forgot
>those redbreast apples
>ready to drop but waiting -
>for now , they are simply
>weights in the balance,
>parts of that hot heavy day.
>
>Look back at that girl, couched
>on green, but say nothing.
>She is poised between past
>and future. Your words would nail
>her to the present. In this garden,
>silences crouch in a shadow
>like toads growing jewels.
>
> grasshopper
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