gary, i've thought of something like that, but found it a bit too
restrictive in the process. who knows, i might find a way to return to it
though.
thanks,
michi
----- Original Message -----
From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, October 29, 2002 6:59 PM
Subject: Re: new sub: Autumn Blues
But I have learned to trace
your features in every chestnut's
clouded face, taught the wind chime
your voice. This book in my lap
can't be someone else's story,
when I find among its pages
a word I had not known before you.
--Michi
Michi, a good read and I think you have some good suggestions from others,
always a little tightening possible. For me I would suggest that you stay
in form. 6 line stanzas with a short one at the end.
Thanks.
Gary
Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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