Gary Thanks for comments I have learned so much from you in the past.At the
moment I seem to be cutting more and more words out in some of my poems and
think I have just about cut all unneccesary words out when you come up with
some more. Thanks for careful reading. Sally J
>From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new sub Sands of time
>Date: Tue, 29 Oct 2002 09:53:20 -0800
>
>Sally, I like the mystery, a good read. A couple of wee thoughts. Here;
>
>Her sea eyes stared
>at his empty bucket
>dried up bait
>
> I would cut up and at the end I would not drop left him in its own line.
>
>Thanks.
>
>Gary
>
>Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
>http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
>
>*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
>
>Poets for Peace. ¡Poemas sí, balas no!
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