Sally, I like the mystery, a good read. A couple of wee thoughts. Here;
Her sea eyes stared
at his empty bucket
dried up bait
I would cut up and at the end I would not drop left him in its own line.
Thanks.
Gary
Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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