Hi Christina, Interesting form - I missed the earlier correspondence about
the last pome to which this form is related? but, yes, each line is repeated
once only, three line further on, and lines 1 and 3 are reprised in the last
verse.....

It is mouth-wateringly clever. Food is such a useful imagery - who can
resist it.."buttered meat" - how wonderfully decadent, so fitting to the
pampered 'creature of the light'.

I see it as having a lovely oblique 'go' at the Western European/North
American lifestyle, yes? In this interpretation the 'rest of the world 11'
get "the sweepings" (cf crumbs from the rich man's table?)
Bollywood = Third World?

The repetition works to convey the way the world is trapped in its
wealth/poverty, rich world/poor world. This poem is very effective indeed
and reads really well, building to a cycle. Love to hear you perform it.

I pass on a tip that I learned from Lynne Taylor - for a group of lovely
coined words, often nouns pressed deliciously into verbs, it makes the sense
clearer to use an apostraphe eg 'Velcro'd' is easier on the eye than
'Velcroed',(which could be mis-read in the tail as 'oh-ed')




>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub:  Pet Pooch Pinched by Satan's Sweeper  (and a reply to
>      Christine B)
>Date: Sat, 26 Oct 2002 05:31:37 EDT
>
>I'm very sorry to be so unspeakably noisy at the moment.  It's because I've
>had builders in, so I'm stuck at home at the computer, bored out of my
>skull.
>  The good news is that they finish on Monday:-)
>Anyhow, by way of a reply to Christine's question about the form of the
>last
>pome, this follows the original pattern that one was written in but I
>changed
>the line breaks and made four line stanzas into three line stanzas.
>bw
>christina
>
>
>              Pet Pooch Pinched by Satan's Sweeper
>
>              After the shampoo and shears,
>              I was left with the sweepings.
>              Monsoon boots - it was dressed to kill -
>              all curls, double-soled and Velcroed.
>
>              I was left with the sweepings.
>              Diamond collar, silk leash,
>              all curls, double-soled and Velcroed -
>              I'm used to that.
>
>              Diamond collar, silk leash -
>              the world at its paws.
>              I'm used to that -
>              that Bollywood, cock your leg on my door,
>
>              the world at its paws.
>              Mumbai mistress in Versace,
>              Bollywood cock your leg on my door.
>              No bollocks - they were snipped.
>
>              Mumbai mistress in Versace,
>              chauffeur to Malabar Hills.
>              No bollocks.  They were snipped
>              long ago when its tail was docked.
>
>              Chauffeur to Malabar Hills,
>              buttered meat for supper.
>              Long ago, when its tail was docked,
>              I lived on dal and rice.  No pickles.
>
>              Buttered meat for supper -
>              I like buttered meat.  Very tasty.
>              I lived on dal and rice.  No pickles.
>              Here, poochi-woochi.  Nice doggy...
>
>              I like buttered meat.  Very tasty
>              after the shampoo and shears.
>              Here, poochi-woochi,  nice doggy...
>              Monsoon boots?  It was dressed to kill.
>
>
>
>
>
>
>              christina fletcher
>


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