Hi again barbara,
Thanks for comments. Present tense sounds good to me, so I've made a few
changes, and have picked up the couple of typos - poor attention span on my
part while doing initial editing I'm afraid.
I may read the piece tomorrow night. If so, I may get a better sense of
which bits work ok and which don't. we shall see.
many thanks.
frank
The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
>Frank,
>
>A few nits below. I would make it present tense, more immediate.
>
>Hope something helps.
>Barbara
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