this has got to be the best first line, Sally
>The room sighs into a lotus position
>hard chairs clasp soft flesh
>women pant without labour
>lay down [the]{handbags?} bags
>as if eggs are hatching
couldn't you junk the first stanza? and who needs 'labour' when you've got
all those eggs and all that panting?
P-P
>From: Sally James <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub In the room the women come and go. Hyperpoem
>Date: Fri, 18 Jan 2002 17:01:43 -0000
>
>Here is my attempt at the hyper poem
>
>Line "In the room the women come and go"
>
>
>
>In the room the women come and go
>I watch them all day
>skirts ballooned, backs bent
>feet splayed
>children follow, totter
>clutch hemlines, raise eyebrows
>cry, laugh, tap mum's belly
>when the baby kicks
>
>The room sighs into a lotus position
>hard chairs clasp soft flesh
>women pant without labour
>lay down the bags
>as if eggs are hatching
>
>A starched nurse calls a new name
>one woman smiles
>staggers to attention
>the others move up a place
>children chatter, wriggle
>a tired woman knits, drops a stitch
>and a pattern is formed
>another reads a book
>licks her lips
>turns over a new leaf
>
>Outside a dog howls
>a church clock chimes three
>an aeroplane stripes clear blue
>a bird sings on a shattered tree
>
>I hear men laughing in the corridor
>and in the room the women
>still come and go.
>
>Sally James Jan 18th 02
>
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