Dear Bob, One who farts in the bath and is a poet has the balance of life
perfect I reckon. And thanks for your kind crit.. Philip
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: new submission - Rock Garden Blues
>Date: Thu, 24 Oct 2002 19:57:18 +0000
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>Hi Philip,
>I'm still enjoying the fun in this poem! But at first I didn't want to read
>"Disemboguements of bubbles" but now I'm saying it I sort of feel the sound
>(like a fart in the bath?) LOL and cheeky grin!
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>Do others feel the word "looks" strange in the poem? (I guess there's no
>need to eat baked beans and run the bath to try my notion out!).
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>The whole poem, tho, is neat and the last line is satisfying! A fine read!
>
>Bob
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>>From: Philip Burton <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: new submission - Rock Garden Blues
>>Date: Tue, 22 Oct 2002 00:16:25 +0100
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>> Rock Garden Blues
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>>I stretched my childhood
>>on the fertile stones, was in tune
>>with the water feature’s inelastic drone
>>that drowned the shindy of cats
>>the ghosts of whinnying horses
>>the violet scented matrons
>>and the brown-aled men
>>returning to meat and vegetable.
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>>One fishless night, insurgent anglers
>>introduced a blue detergent
>>to the header tank.
>>Disemboguements of bubbles
>>invaded Harbour Parade.
>>You may have seen, “Clean Start
>>for Ramsgate” in the news. But not
>>the wringing of necks, the ironing-out,
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>>the folding away of a boy.
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