I agree and I love the economy of this poem.
BW
Christine

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Bob Cooper [SMTP:[log in to unmask]]
> Sent: 21 October 2002 21:55
> To:   [log in to unmask]
> Subject:      Re: New Sub: Death in th Park
>
> Hi Arthur,
> Wow! what a great poem! I like the simple uncomplicated language, it works
>
> so powerfully. The line "laid down and wearily breathed the night a
> while."
> is just so hauntingly, lingeringly, evocatively, sounds-right-ingly
> slow-to-say-and-and-to-breathe and good!
> But why didn't you mention it was the Kruger National Park in the title?
> Initially I found my tizzy brain wondering if it was a park much like the
> parks near where I live (and an elephant had wandered off from, say, a
> circus!). I wouldn't think of calling the Lake Distric (National Park)
> just
> the Park! But title's are the pits, aren't they just!
> Bob
>
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>
> >From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: New Sub: Death in th Park
> >Date: Sun, 20 Oct 2002 17:59:58 +0100
> >
> >            Death in the Park
> >
> >
> >
> >It rained the day Chokwani died,
> >
> >all day and well into the night,
> >
> >bringing new life to the savannah.
> >
> >His herd drifted, slow grey clouds,
> >
> >down towards the swelling river,
> >
> >trunks testing the air, wallowing in the cool.
> >
> >
> >
> >He sought denser bush
> >
> >dragged his years in behind him
> >
> >laid down and wearily breathed the night a while.
> >
> >Later, before dawn, the clouds cleared
> >
> >and a full moon lit the grasslands,
> >
> >the thorn bush and the baobab tree.
> >
> >
> >
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