Hi Frank,
I rather like this stylistic development you have manifested here of a
grander style that fits well with your realist narrative approach. I was a
little taken aback by the form here then felt it worked. Eliot has this
quality of allowing or giving permission to other poets a certain freedom.
bw
James
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: Hyper-sub - no, not the old city
>Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2002 12:39:55 +1100
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>(my line = 'streets that follow like a tedious argument')
>
>... and the old city is a wasting of time there is nothing of value
>there
>no return on that investment those twenty years of purgatude
>spent with an aspirational heart every day from the beginning
>when to walk that way was something fresh and new each pace
>holding its own speed and reason much like here perhaps
>here in this newer place with this newer purpose
>so draped with the coatings now of experience knowledge
>perhaps it is not the purpose that has changed not so very much
>
>this though this is not that ancient wreckage with its labyrinth
>byways
>foetid distractions those twisted streets that follow like a tedious
>argument
>renewed upon boulevards and avenues that open yawning black
>in sickly honeyed invitation with each tempted visitation to that
>past no
>this is newer ground these paths are fresh and open look up
>that blue is the sky in this place it is mine yours ours if
>you wish it
>you and me and the coloured blue of our own sky
>
>no let us not go near to the old city
>there is nothing there for us nothing
>
>~
>Frank
>
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bw
James
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