Hi D.C., Glad to have had the opportunity to read your memorable poem on a
fascinating theme. Philip
>From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: Talk is hope (philip)
>Date: Fri, 18 Oct 2002 08:49:23 -0230
>
>Thank you Philip for reading and your comments
>"stumbles" instead of "buckles", that is a good suggestion,
>I will have a stronger connection.
>
>
>" Perhaps war is an earthquake of the
>soul of man"...........Like this!
>davidc
>
>Philip Burton wrote:
>
> > There is much power generated in the double connotation of 'plate' -
>plate
> > glass, tectonic plates of the earth's crust. 'a land' rather than 'the
>land'
> > has a distancing effect and a dizzying effect too with its often
> > nationalistic use eg 'the land of my fathers' and 'back to the land',
>'the
> > land of my birth' etc. 'FURNISHED TOMBS' is a strong image. 'Hope is a
> > helping hand' has a philosophical and moral truth ringing through it.
> >
> > My one difficulty was with how the implied images (of development,
> > earthquake and war) hold together in the poem. 'stumbles' for 'buckles'
> > perhaps? I'm looking to link with 'boots march'. Overall, the scope of
>the
> > poem is massive and strikes a chord with me. This is a theme that only a
> > poet can hope to explore, so well done. Perhaps war is an earthquake of
>the
> > soul of man.
> >
> > >From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
> > >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> > >To: [log in to unmask]
> > >Subject: Talk is hope
> > >Date: Tue, 15 Oct 2002 01:06:44 -0230
> > >
> > >Shifting crust,
> > >................... plates of glass,
> > >a land seems docile weak,
> > >years build peace.
> > >
> > >When the earth buckles
> > >houses are furnished tombs
> > >walls and lives crumble.
> > >Hope is a helping hand.
> > >
> > >..............Shift power,
> > >infection of conflict.
> > >years build peace
> > >
> > >When boots march,
> > >laces tied with hate,
> > >families flee life hurts.
> > >Hope is a helping hand.
> >
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