Hi to all, anmd thank you for comment on this piece.
I've noted comments about the spacing for pauses - obviously going over the
top and I'll bear it in mnd, but I don't wish to use commas, or necessarily
line breaks, so I'll just have to watch out for it.
I don't want to turn the piece into huge tragedy or comedy, though I think
the element of martyrdom or self pity probably belongs. Sometimes giving up
an addiction can have slightly surreal moments - that's what I tried to
catch a little of, with myself surrounded in a cloud - like soem smoky
rooms, even though I was not smoking, while those around me have no
knowledge that I'm feeling on edge or strange - that kind of thing.
Grassy, I made up 'purgatude'. It felt right, even though it isn't a real
word - purgatory and servitude/hardship - something like that.
Thanks again to all, I'll watch out for the space usage, though I tend to
think with pauses and not line breaks or commas. I'll work on it.
Cheers,
Frank
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