As a thought... (but not one to dwell on too much if you don't want) what
would the poem (also) be doing if the first lines became:
The day we shoot the poet
then dance around the fountain...
Would that make the ending more powerful still? (Because the echoes will
still be heard despite what "we've" done!). Using irony, tho, in an elegy
isn't easy to carry off... but it might be possible.
Bob
Bob, a great idea, but one I have to think about. I might work, but I need
to let the idea marinate a bit more.
Thanks much.
Gary
Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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