Hi Gary,
A fine, nay faultless, poem! I've met people who fought in Spain... but i 
won't sidle into anecdotes! Each line offers something extra, unique, to the 
poem.
As a thought... (but not one to dwell on too much if you don't want) what 
would the poem (also) be doing if the first lines became:
The day we shoot the poet
then dance around the fountain...
Would that make the ending more poweful still? (Because the echoes will 
still be heard despite what "we've" done!). Using irony, tho, in an elegy 
isn't easy to carry off... but it might be possible.
Bob


>From: Gary B <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: To Celebrate a Death:  Lorca
>Date: Tue, 8 Oct 2002 10:02:27 -0700
>
>To Celebrate a Death:  Lorca
>
>The day they shoot the poet,
>we dance around the fountain,
>pour spiced wine and drink
>until the bookstalls flood,
>treason to the people defeated.
>
>The laws passed, he was warned:
>No more twisted metaphors,
>coded similes, forbidden mysteries.
>Only simple eulogies, jingles
>and party slogans allowed.
>
>The celebration lasts through the night,
>sure we have cut away the disease -
>until we hear a baby cry,
>swallows return in spring,
>wild lilies bloom along hedgerows.
>
>As bull's blood soaks the arena floor,
>the sound of ink on paper echoes.
>
>(Federico Garcia Lorca was shot at dawn August 19, 1939 with two
>bullfighters and a school teacher.  He was thirty-eight.)
>
>
>Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
>http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
>
>*New*  Wild/Eliot  Hyperpoem at:  http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
>
>Poets for Peace.  ˇPoemas sí, balas no!






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