Philip, a great read. You might consider the short lines being part of
those before:
Lifted up.
and
Beyond the sea.
Perhaps a bit of tightening could occur, but I will let someone else. This
one I'm only going to enjoy.
Thanks.
Gary
Oct Michael Dean and poems for peace at:
http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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