Thanks for your thoughts Marilyn, I enjoy telling a story. Phil
>From: Marilyn Injeyan <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: THE HERRING GULL
>Date: Sun, 6 Oct 2002 19:35:47 EDT
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>In a message dated 10/6/02 1:05:02 PM Pacific Daylight Time,
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>I enjoyed this story and the nice rhythm throughout. One suggestion in the
>first stanza is to take out "the" in front of ebb tide. I feel like I'm at
>sea (a very good thing!)
>
>Marilyn
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> > The Herring Gull PHILIP BURTON
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> > When days were young
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> > I’d rig a hide, out on the rocks
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> > at the heels of the ebb tide
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> > and be with herring gulls.
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