No complaint about the double 'ing' here,Gary? Even I found it clumsy.
I am a moth,
the last moth,
the other moths dead or dying
on the rotting boards
of a sagging porch in Ketchikan.
--grassy
Of course. But I didn't say it was a well-written example. So a
correction.
I am a moth,
the last moth,
the other moths dead or dying
on the rotten boards
of a broken porch in Ketchikan.
I don't have the same problem with "I," great or not, but that could be
The last moth nears the flame,
the other moths dead or dying
on a broken porch's rotten
boards outside of Ketchikan.
But then mostly I was funning with Sally.
Smiles.
Gary
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