hi noun,
Starts good and slangy but then it changes to good english
I like the story behind this piece
My suggestion is to continue on with the same 'voice'
or repair the first line
david
noun wrote:
> Rugus said there aint no such thing as a window to the soul
> the soul receives no light except from thought
> and thought comes from the brain
>
> Rugus said the brain is in total darkness
> until God turns on the light
> and when he does
> the eyes see everything
> in a different light
> and no window let that light in
> It was God himself
> and he is the door
>
> noun
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