Hi ryfkah,
A couple of small points. I wondered if the following line shoul dbe in
plural: 'She prepares a dinner'.
Also, I was a little confused by '>Her husband and his wife'. Maybe a little
more clarity about which she is her and which is another woman.
Cheers,
Frank
>Fair Weather
>
>Time clouds
>Memory vapor
>
>Sun lies
>like a fly
>Its buzz all there is
>
>In the car her children sing
>play license plate games
>chant We want McDonald's
>
>Far from home
>Relocation
>
>He stays away
>works long hours
>She prepares a dinner
>he never eats
>
>I hate you the man roars
>She sobs Her ear
>bleeds from earring's crush
>lost love's stigmata
>
>Her husband and his wife
>leave for the French wine country
>Someday she'll travel too
>
>The woman laughs
>Her children offer
>their bouquet of wild flowers
>
>The day sunny
>
>Ryfkah 9/28/02
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