In a message dated 09.28.02 3:35:40 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< SOMETHING WILL ALWAYS HAPPEN
Something will always happen
even after the mere opening
of eyes [This could be a poem in itself]
and the beginning of awareness maybe skip and?]
from the assumptions of unconsciousness [perhaps you don't need from?]
and the confusion of dreams
when the body will sream [scream]
for food
a voice scream for life [delete a voice?]
or distain for it -
had it time develop
its perfect philosophy before tiring [maybe before tiring on its own line?]
for while three quarters
of Wang Wei's poems no longer exist
and only suggestions of his painted scroll
we can still
sit beside a river
or inside a temple like his
over a thousand years later
and recreate his poems for him
over and over again. [very nice tie to the Master]
>>
Very thought-provoking poem...thank you.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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