Hi Arthur,
A delightful word journey here. There's pleasing, and subtle, 
rhyme/half-rhyme games being played linking some of the lines together as 
well. But, for the way I keep reading it, the last line seems almost jerky 
(in comparison to how I read the rest), it feels sort of too long... But 
that might be my ear!
Bob


>From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New Sub: Astrophysics on a Greek Mountainside.
>Date: Sun, 22 Sep 2002 17:53:28 +0100
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>Astrophysics on a Greek mountainside.
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>The night was rich with warm perfumes
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>and stars shone overhead.
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>“So what are stars?” she said
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>and trailed her fingers through leaves of bay
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>that pressed upon the edges of our way.
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>
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>“Stars? Why, they are enormous spheres of burning gas.”
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>I explained and cursed the dark
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>that caused my shin to bark
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>against a broken branch she’d seemed to miss.
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>She cooed at my distress and moued a kiss.
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>“Really? They don’t seem very big to me," she teased.
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>I rubbed my aching shin,
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>her teeth twinkled in a grin.
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>“They are a long way away and only seem to be small.”
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>I snarled, “They really are quite large, not small at all.”
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>“How did they get there, then? Where did it all begin?”
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>  “Well. It’s a rather long story.” I sighed.
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>“I have the patience, love, time is on our side.”.
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>“Well, it seems that first there was a Bang.”
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>“A Bang?” “ Yes, and then it all began”
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>“How a Bang?” I sensed her frown. “An explosion?”
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>  “Yes. A given moment. Bang! and all began.”
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>“Like that ! “ I clapped my hands.
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>“Like that?” She clapped in turn, “And everything was there?”
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>She spread her hands and spun and stars swirled in the night air.
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>“Well. No, not quite. All the bits, particles they’re called, were there,
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>and all the laws of how and why and when,
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>they were there at once, and then,
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>well, Time began, my love, the beginning,
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>the First Cause, our Universe and everything came into being.”
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>She took my hands and leaned against me, breathed,
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>“Is all this true?”
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>“It’s what is said to me,’ I shrugged. “ I tell it so to you.’
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>“That’s the way it was, and is, or so they say.”
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>“And who are they to say this was the way
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>
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>and not some other start began it all?”
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>“Astrophysicists.” I kissed her palms .
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>She folded neatly in my arms
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>“They make a study of these sort of things,
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>of mesons, muons,  pions, quarks, of cabbages and kings.”
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>“And that is how it all began.” she murmured in my ear.
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>I kissed my affirmation, smelled her hair,
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>lowered her to the grass and there
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>breathed all the scents of rosemary and sage
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>while stars blazed white as spaces between words of poetry on a printed 
>page.






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