Christina, seems incomplete to me. And I wonder if line breaks like this
would improve the read:
Spare us Matryoshkas,
stolen rolls -
'Now Wash Your Hands Please',
your teeth in boxes with clockless keys,
pamphlets:
'The Fruits of Unity',
'The Second Front is Coming'.
I remove the's and an and cause that is what I see, Sorry if there is too
much rewrite. Mostly though, it seems to need more.
Thanks.
Gary
Sept Suzanne and new Centrum at: http://gardawg.homestead.com/gardawg.html
*New* Wild/Eliot Hyperpoem at: http://wildhyper.homestead.com/front.html
Poets for Peace. ˇPoemas sí, balas no!
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