Mmmm! I really like this; think it's elegant; nothing
in the way of the message. Maybe you could put the
word 'playground' in to please Gary without
overweighting the lines. What do I know? cheers, cara
--- Arthur <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > Bob,
Cara thanks. I had psted this as just a passing
> comment but your insight has shown me a better poem
> I think:
> They reorganised education in the city;
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> closed the old school;
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> blinded windows with bare boards;
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> stilled squeals, dispersed mauling boys.
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> Wind bowls hoops of leaves;
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> chases beer cans chiming into corners.
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> A detested childhood is puked
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> against the mossed and grimy wall.
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>
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