I like your poem exactly as it is.
kol tuv, Ryfsis
Smiles, sis, but I made a wee change here:
she noshes and tosses
until the number 5 bus arrives
throws the bag in a trashcan
pulls up her sagging slip
steps onto the bus
Thanks, Garbro.
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