Then they gave her a cheque she couldn¹t cash
no bank account. She'd had a miscarriage
up at the cottage, brought about perhaps
by worry and starvation.
So the woman
took the girl indoors into the kitchen,
among the pots, the cups, the marmalade,
Sally-ee, the refrain works well, my favs are the first and last S. I see a
break at So the woman. The middle get way prose to me and seems to lack a
bit of the magic and fun of the first and last.
There is a hint of light rhymes with tea. Maybe more? And maybe tea always
sits on the end of a line?
(Q: Do Americans know our usage 'sign on', - followed by 'They' < which is
universally understood in UK? )
And indeed to this cousin, the above is a bit of mystery, but then so is
some of what I say to you folk.
Thanks.
Gary
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