They round your eyes with coral gems and pearls
and xylophone your ears with magic shells.
You dally-dangle with bright mermaids' curls
and feast on banquets, fresh from briny swells.
Grassy, the above is the best to me, great word fun and a bit of magic. I
agree that the next S slides a bit into cliche, but also see the lines a
good contrast to the fey above: The Good News vs the Old Ways.
Thanks.
Gary
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