Hi Christina,
Yes, nice one. I like the way you get in the life details through the
washing and the more metaphorical musing on the machine. I'd say there was
potential here for a sequence of sonnets if you feel up to it. I've just
been perusing WORM 14 and it's great, not just because I'm in it. Well done.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: possibly another of the 'Sonnets of a Single Life'?
>Date: Tue, 15 Jan 2002 16:21:37 EST
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>Hello friends, I'm sticking my nose in after Worming with this ermm...
>well... not sure... disaster? Catastrophe? Anyhow, it's about my new
>washing machine which is the bee's knees.
>bw
>c
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> You are a Meissen of machines, my Bosch.
> When I dispensed the enzyme soap I knew
> only the strength of your Intensive Wash
> could renovate and make my fibres glow.
> The trickle of warm water as you churn
> seeps into spots - the spills of rancid milk,
> dark marks of sex and ink, the dye of wine -
> I have surrendered all to Extra Soak.
> Deep in your swell of suds they'll toss and reel -
> your constant pulse and scientific care
> will drain and rinse and drain and rinse until
> your hydrosensor knows the water's clear.
> And when you spin I'll watch your drum rotate:
> your vortex, where my stains evaporate.
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>christina fletcher
bw
James
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