Hi Frank,
This has the potential to be perfectly flat due to the subject matter
colliding with your well honed style. However, this does not happen because
of the way you round it off at the end and create a cycle that lifts the
rest of the poem. I like this.
bw
James
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub: a lot o' week
>Date: Mon, 26 Aug 2002 17:45:31 +1000
>
>tuesday and wednesday are the empty days
>no prospects to look forward to
>
>thursdays need at least a moment to check numbers
>and ensure the ticket is still good
>
>friday is a surge of hope held in the belly
>a mind filled with with bright lights and speculations
>
>saturday should be the big day but I don't watch in the evening
>my details are on a plastic card and my evening is hopeful dreams
>
>sunday the papers are a temptation I resist
>that is no way to discover something momentous
>
>monday every entry has been computer checked
>and any call on the telephone could be the one that tells me
>
>tuesday is an empty day
>
>~
>
>Frank
>
>The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
>http://www.hotkey.net.au/~flp/F_index.htm
>
>
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bw
James
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