Hi Frank,
I take it the voice of this monologue, in using words like "terribly" and
"bemoaning" and "flaming," is affecting a style. It's the kind of person I'd
not want to queue next to near the snacks at a party. Whoever he or she is,
I sense they'd have a bit too much to drink.
Could the really long line be chopped in half? And/or (a question!) what's
the justification for the line breaks? I mean some phrases seem broken in
half for no reason...
Bob
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Sub - words and music
>Date: Thu, 8 Aug 2002 15:14:55 +1000
>
>me
>well I'd rather do music I think
>it's terribly unfair
>to be stuck with playing smart-arse around
>a paltry bunch of words and mark you
>they're mostly the exact same collection
>of baubles of babble you'll see on any dog-ear used
>over and over again for
>the sake of one more new sentence
>structure or some fool of an idea that just needs to be written so
>people can tell if it really fell
>in the forest or not even if it was
>just the one hand clapping or pen penning or
>whatever but it has to be the music for me
>that rise and fall of melody and song I'm going
>around and humming or singing something all
>the blasted time you know singing
>and humming a tune nobody ever heard before I
>can make it sound all right too a very
>rich timbre I have when I
>hum away to myself it's very melodic and if
>I could write just one of them down I'd make
>a fortune for sure because somebody
>would be wanting to make a record and offer
>me ongoing royalties but that of course
>is where they fail because there appears to be
>no way to write these things these wretched words
>let me down at the critical juncture and I can
>do nothing but scratch terse notes to no-one in particular
>bemoaning my fate mostly non-melodically
>
>words
>flaming rubbish in my view
>no good for saying any dashed thing
>no use for music
>
>~
>
>Frank
>
>The Tales of Faust poetry page can be found at:
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>
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