fungus coats a dead twig
with viridian life
footsteps behind me
Arthur, improved ku in your last post though there are ways to make them
better. One might be to be less linear. For example in the above, consider
footsteps behind me
fungus coats a dead twig
with viridian life
Another is simplicity, nothing wrong with three dollar words but given the
choice between words, the simplier works best. Consider a good haiku to be
of the moment. When you saw the twig, did you think viridian or green?
Good luck.
Gary
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