Tlhanks for the considered input.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 8/5/02 1:19:28 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah,
This poem takes a few lines to get going. I think the problem is the first
three lines that would be better left out and start with "I seek the
stranger". To my mind and ears a much more effective beginning. Otherwise
its of an excellent standard I've come to expect from you.
bw
James >>
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