thank you Ryfkah
T)O(
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From: The Pennine Poetry Works [mailto:[log in to unmask]]On
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Sent: 03 August 2002 17:24
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Subject: Re: new: The fishermen
Mazel tov Terri on a poem IMHO exquisitely written.
Comments below:
In a message dated 8/2/02 2:00:14 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< The fishermen
around the settling ponds
a dozen dotted priests [am visualizing this - interesting the mind pics
that
occur]
observe the murky depths
the air between
the seedy grass and blackcurrant hedges [love blackcurrant hedges/sticky as
jam]
sticky as jam
the learning disabled
out on a trip from the Marlene Reid
point with unembarrassed arms [like this enjambment from one stanza to the
next]
at the lad who is landing
his fourth fish ever
surrounded by strangers
a gunmetal carp
scooped from a pool of tomato soup
and let go [great ending]
Terri )O( >>
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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