Hi Gar,
Yes, someone else commented on the same thing...I took out the 'done's'
and that helps the rhythm some. Thanks for the help, this was a tough one
for me.
CW, Mary :O)
--- garydawg <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Now I'm down on my knees, I'm a'scrubbin ol' crone
> it's a dirty ol' job that ain't never gets done
>
> Mary, this is fun. Though a mistep or two.
>
> a'scrubbin old crone is one. Maybe 'on my knees a'scrubbin' '
>
> that ain't never the other. the ain't wrong for this grammer. I would
> cut
> or if you want ain't maybe 'and I an't never done'
>
> Thanks.
>
> Gary
>
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