Hi Terri,
I like the 'holidiary'. Wasn't sure about 'then and then', probably depends
on the way you say it.
The poem works very well.
Cheers,
Frank
>Redbrook
>
>
>my holidiary has become
>a catalogue of then and then
>proof positive that we enjoyed
>the forest and the sun
>
>next to the Wye we took a break
>that hugged the skirts of Offa's Dyke
>parked in England drank in Wales
>and never walked the walk
>
>but wandered underground instead
>Clearwell Hopewell Puzzle Wood
>a glossary of ochre mines
>and iron streams of blood
>
>my holidiary has become
>a book-keeping of rivers swum
>scratches on a bag of clay
>it seals a teller's stones
>
>
>
>Terri )O(
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